Lots of action, Demeter! We are on the way to our ending very nicely with your addition. Nice writing and scene to get us there.
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Chapter Twelve read like a screenplay...an action 'play, to be specific. I felt like I was in one of the best scenes from The Walking Dead, or even from the videogame series Resident Evil. I could feel the fear, and I could empathize with the characters that were in peril.
When a particular character had a zombie literally biting into the individual's flesh, it shocked me. I forgot that, like the aforementioned AMC series, no one should be considered immune from that sort of stuff. But it's like any good book one reads -- writers who know what they're doing make you feel one way, only to make you feel another way very abruptly, for purposes of changing the mood so quickly that certain emotional responses are summoned.
The ending of the chapter likewise changed my orientation of where we are going. I liked it quite a bit -- it's the kind of construction that is very additive of value. Now I'm in suspense as to what it means for the group.
Demeter, you could be in Hollywood right now writing a Liam Neeson thriller (or maybe Arnold Schwarzenegger's comeback). Thanks for the piece!
I agree. I haven't even read the story, but I come here to see what Rrty has to say!Rrty,
I think I enjoy reading your comments just as much as the sections of the stories! I agree. Demeter is some writer and it does feel like a screenplay.
Leif
I really appreciate you giving each writer a very nice write up. Very thoughtful and much appreciated.Chapter Twelve read like a screenplay...an action 'play, to be specific. I felt like I was in one of the best scenes from The Walking Dead, or even from the videogame series Resident Evil. I could feel the fear, and I could empathize with the characters that were in peril.
When a particular character had a zombie literally biting into the individual's flesh, it shocked me. I forgot that, like the aforementioned AMC series, no one should be considered immune from that sort of stuff. But it's like any good book one reads -- writers who know what they're doing make you feel one way, only to make you feel another way very abruptly, for purposes of changing the mood so quickly that certain emotional responses are summoned.
The ending of the chapter likewise changed my orientation of where we are going. I liked it quite a bit -- it's the kind of construction that is very additive of value. Now I'm in suspense as to what it means for the group.
Demeter, you could be in Hollywood right now writing a Liam Neeson thriller (or maybe Arnold Schwarzenegger's comeback). Thanks for the piece!
...and he didn't ask how much money we made or what it cost...I really appreciate you giving each writer a very nice write up. Very thoughtful and much appreciated.
Flake - somehow or other it seems I overlooked your section of the story - my apologies for not commenting - very good work - thanks again for contributing (this is the first year I have read any of the stories)Demeter, wonderful action-packed episode. Really great job, well done!