Draft, desperately need suggestions

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Flat Matt

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I've copied your story into a word document and will have a little go at editing it myself. I could use the practice, as I've not written anything for a while now. I'll PM it to you when it's done.
 

Prescott fry

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Thanks a ton, I was holding back on sending it out because I know there is something off. I think it's the middle when Dr. Ashisha is lecturing on and on. Granted, I'm having my friend create an Illustration at the middle. It's gonna be an image of a globe, I have it as a map with the red dots, but it will be a globe with the Komodimo chamber sticking off. The the top of the chamber, connected by coils, will be the energy representing ashisha. The main chamber will have the doctor inside sititing I his white smocks. But as cool as the illustration may be, it's not part of the written story
 
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