Works by Prescott Fry

[Prescott fry]

The Mark of the Beast | Prescott Fry

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Hello, this is the first time I finished a short story and walked away feeling genuinely good about the succinctness and overall plot structure. Surprising enough, I've recieved tons of positive reviews while work shopping the piece, and even my editor, said the story was great(she never does that.) anyhow, it's onyl ten novel pages, so if you get a chance to Read it over, please leave comments below on the blog, or like the facebook page because I want to make sure there is some way for me to reach you again. Hope you enjoy. Shalom!

 

[asoul]

I am writing this post only because you wrote "Shalom". Hence, you can know Jewish tradition...

For some Jews the number 666 is not the Mark of the Beast. In Kabbalistic Judaism the number 666 represents the creation and perfection of the world. If to use Gematria 666 may be interpreted as "I am Anusim" (Crypto-Jew). Few elite secret societies use Gematria of this number also. To describe their "professional status". So the number 666 is a wide field for a writer.

 

[mal]

The bible says you cannot buy or sell without accepting the mark of the beast. Interestingly enough, and a bit creepy, most UPC barcodes are surrounded by 2 sixes at each end and one in the middle (those 2 skinny lines together represent a six). That is some crazy, wacky stuff. Happy 2015, Mal.

 

[Kingfisher]

I thought it had a great beginning, but I don't really think it feels...finished, I suppose. It felt like the ending just crashed onto the scene without warrant, you know? The dialogue also seemed a little hammy, the 'please, noooo!' reminded me of that infamous scene in Troll 2 and made me giggle!

Anyways, that's my criticisms, that it feels incomplete and the spoken dialogue is a little cheesy. The positives, however, is that I think you know how to structure your story well and can briskly move the plot along without sacrificing detail. The problem is maybe you went a bit too fast!

Anyways, I wish you the best with your writing. I write too, I know how tough it can be. Can't wait to read future stories from you.

 

[Prescott fry]

Do you got a picture of this barcode

The bible says you cannot buy or sell without accepting the mark of the beast. Interestingly enough, and a bit creepy, most UPC barcodes are surrounded by 2 sixes at each end and one in the middle (those 2 skinny lines together represent a six). That is some crazy, wacky stuff. Happy 2015, Mal.

 

[Prescott fry]

Thanks for the critique. This is basically the same thing that people had said from the workshops. The story felt a bit artificial, the ending contrived. I'm not sure what to do about the cheesy dialogue, I've been trying my best to make it more realistic. Do you have any advice on that area?

 

[Prescott fry]

I thought it had a great beginning, but I don't really think it feels...finished, I suppose. It felt like the ending just crashed onto the scene without warrant, you know? The dialogue also seemed a little hammy, the 'please, noooo!' reminded me of that infamous scene in Troll 2 and made me giggle!

Anyways, that's my criticisms, that it feels incomplete and the spoken dialogue is a little cheesy. The positives, however, is that I think you know how to structure your story well and can briskly move the plot along without sacrificing detail. The problem is maybe you went a bit too fast!

Anyways, I wish you the best with your writing. I write too, I know how tough it can be. Can't wait to read future stories from you.

The last comment is for kingfisher

 

[Kingfisher]

Dialogue is something that is somewhat tricky. When faced with horror, does everyone yell out in fear and plead? What about dead silence? Extreme fear can render anyone fearless and often does, it can turn the most stoic into a gibbering wreck.

You also need, in my opinion, a very good premise to knock a story as short as yours out of the park. Think about Stephen King's Night Surf. Even if you haven't read The Stand, a sense of doom hangs over the entire story. Combine it after knowing what Captain Trips does to the world and you know just how bad it is and how nobody there stands a chance statistically. Not a very long story but it packs a punch with atmosphere and gloom. It's the end of the world and it's a big old party where all the guests are reluctant to leave.

 

[mal]

Do you got a picture of this barcode

I'll try to add an example image. The 2 long skinny lines on each end and the middle represent the number six. I'm not saying all barcodes are like this or anything, just pointing out what I've heard, read, and seen for myself. Long days, Mal.

 

[Flat Matt]

Do you mind if I ask how old you are, Prescott?

 

[Prescott fry]

Twenty

 

[Prescott fry]

I haven't read night surf but I'll read it over and def get back to you. I think I see what you saying, presenting a story in a tight knit manner. I have read the stand, a personal fav btw. But I totally feel you on that one. Captain trips/ rubber kneck, the threat of that was there the whole time, which now makes sense why he could pull off such a long story. Awesome

Dialogue is something that is somewhat tricky. When faced with horror, does everyone yell out in fear and plead? What about dead silence? Extreme fear can render anyone fearless and often does, it can turn the most stoic into a gibbering wreck.

You also need, in my opinion, a very good premise to knock a story as short as yours out of the park. Think about Stephen King's Night Surf. Even if you haven't read The Stand, a sense of doom hangs over the entire story. Combine it after knowing what Captain Trips does to the world and you know just how bad it is and how nobody there stands a chance statistically. Not a very long story but it packs a punch with atmosphere and gloom. It's the end of the world and it's a big old party where all the guests are reluctant to leave.

 

[Prescott fry]

I'll try to add an example image. The 2 long skinny lines on each end and the middle represent the number six. I'm not saying all barcodes are like this or anything, just pointing out what I've heard, read, and seen for myself. Long days, Mal.

Very strange

 

[Prescott fry]

I was gonna start a new forum but there's already a good discussion on here. Below I have attached the link to a novella that has been a while in the making. The cool thing is that the novel is centered around city of the place where I work. Also, another interesting aspects is the sort of people dynamics within the city of Hagerstown, Md, and it goes along well with the overall theme of the main character, Clay Turner.

Anyhow, read it over. Tell me what you're thinking. This one needs revision desperately. If the story creates enough buzz, with the help of the SK Community, I might go ahead with a 5/1/15 ebook and print publication along with several other stories with undertones of "spiritually."

But this one is heavy, in the deepest sense of the word. It's not polished, or even edited, but anybody who takes the honest effort to reads it—and feel Clay's intimate struggle—Thanks a bunch. I hope you enjoy.

A Toy Box in a Funhouse part 1 | Prescott Fry

 

[Prescott fry]

******Warning: with the recent events in American News, especially the fatal shooting of Michael Brown, as well as the bloodthirsty slays by ISIS affiliates, when this story goes to part two, keep in mind these things as the plots Thickens. ****

 

[Prescott fry]

Every dollar counts! And don't turn away cuz this is an Internet donation. You do it all the time with that basket passed around church. Here's a chance you can actually help somebody who truly needs it. The top three donors will get a free copy mailed to them and your name printed in the book on the dedication page when it's published in May. Struggles in life can't stop me!

5/1/15- A Toy Box in a Funhouse by Michael Overzat - GoFundMe

FRY

 

[Moderator]

I'll be very honest that my first reaction was to delete this as monetary solicitations would not typically be allowed. Since you're using a crowd sourcing site and there is some possibility of payback for the contribution and it is strictly voluntary so anyone not wanting to participate does not have to do so, I'll allow it this one time. Just don't be spamming member profiles simply to raise your own profile. Your recent flurry of activity in that regard has been noted.

 

[no bounce no play]

Please remind us when A Toybox in a Funhouse can be purchased. I'm looking forward to reading it

 

[Prescott fry]

I'll be very honest that my first reaction was to delete this as monetary solicitations would not typically be allowed. Since you're using a crowd sourcing site and there is some possibility of payback for the contribution and it is strictly voluntary so anyone not wanting to participate does not have to do so, I'll allow it this one time. Just don't be spamming member profiles simply to raise your own profile. Your recent flurry of activity in that regard has been noted.

I've been trying to be more active on this forumn, no intention of spamming

 

[Prescott fry]

5/1/15,

I'm writing six hours a day to work toward this deadline. Not that thst I'm in any sort of rush. I'm just trying to make sure it's perfect for the readers before that date.