My two cents worth -
Get rid of deggsy - a wasted character with no reference.
Change iPod to iphone
Die phone still works
You have a perfect opportunity to use the iPod/ iphone as the tool so why not fill it with relevant tunes for the devil:
Running with the devil - can halen
Sympathy for the devil- Rolling Stones
Devils food - Alice cooper
Devils child - Judas Priest
Number of the beast- iron maiden
The devil in her heart- ?
Devils dance- Metallica
Christmas with the devil- spinal tap
Friend of the devil- grateful dead
Shout at the devil- motley crew
Devil went down to Georgia - (use as setting)
Just another metal head playlist
So instead of buying it from the hooded stranger who just happened to be in town, maybe he saw the opportunity to steal it at the bar???
The hooded stranger looks for it at the bar, but it's just another phone that's been swiped!
Guilty but happy, he begins playing the tunes - but instead of voices - he gets texts saying if you don't return my phone - I'll fecking kill you -
More texts - each getting filthier in the ways he's gonna kill the thief - the guy really wants his phone back !
End by revealing the stranger at the party dancing to the soundtrack of his choice while the party goers die in agony - and then takes the phone from the iphone cradle
TADA!
Jus sayin
Sheemus p. (Retired)
