Show....don't tell. Or as my father used to say, "Keep it simple, stupid." The description of the adult Danny is not a pleasant one and you don't like him in the beginning--well, I didn't and I was very disappointed because I LOVED little Danny in the Shining.
And then I read, "Canny..." and then I read "Mama..." ZOOMMMM POW! Other writers would have spent pages and pages trying to convince us that Dan was a decent human being as his head was hanging in the toilet---but nothing is more powerful than reading "Canny" and reading "Mama" it hits you strong, at gut level every time he takes you there and you start emotionally slobbering like Pavlov's dogs.
Less is so much more. Bravo! Mr. King! BRAVO!
And then I read, "Canny..." and then I read "Mama..." ZOOMMMM POW! Other writers would have spent pages and pages trying to convince us that Dan was a decent human being as his head was hanging in the toilet---but nothing is more powerful than reading "Canny" and reading "Mama" it hits you strong, at gut level every time he takes you there and you start emotionally slobbering like Pavlov's dogs.
Less is so much more. Bravo! Mr. King! BRAVO!