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The Adverb shotgun

Discussion in 'The Long Walk' started by SHEEMIEE, Feb 14, 2017.

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  1. SHEEMIEE

    SHEEMIEE Well-Known Member

    this has to be one of my favourite stories, the simple brutality, the character build, and the shocking normality of the whole idea.

    but what i find fascinating is the use of so many adverbs peppered throughout the pages. this, after SK taught me never to touch them with a lengthy stick.

    Do you think he looks back with fondness of his masterpiece , or embarrassment ?

    curious, because, as instructed, i leave them alone.

    lovingly, sheemus P.

    Stephen King on Writing, Fear, and the Atrocity of Adverbs – Brain Pickings
     
  2. GNTLGNT

    GNTLGNT The idiot is IN

    ...indupitably....
     
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  3. mjs9153

    mjs9153 Peripherally known member..

    I really need to read this over has been years and years since I have.. I have the original soft cover that had all four of the Bachman books in that one I believe..
     
  4. GNTLGNT

    GNTLGNT The idiot is IN

    ...yeppur, it sure does....
     
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  5. skimom2

    skimom2 Just moseyin' through...

    He was young, and young (or inexperienced) writers love them some adverbs and multiple adjectives :). Look at the difference between the original Gunslinger and the rewrite: many adverbs were lost in the fire.
     
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  6. SHEEMIEE

    SHEEMIEE Well-Known Member

    me too - i'm hoping my daughter will pick it up soon.
     
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  7. SHEEMIEE

    SHEEMIEE Well-Known Member

    yeh, that's the problem with advice, not being allowed to make the same mistake other have had to trudge through.

    i writing a short story ATM, and trying to weed them out with substitute words, and boy it's tough.

    he didn't suddenly enter the room - he has to crash through the door !!!

    bah - writing tools!

    why is my toolbox filed with only rusty spanners and broken hammers!
     
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  8. DiO'Bolic

    DiO'Bolic Not completely obtuse

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  9. carrie's younger brother

    carrie's younger brother Well-Known Member

    I love The Long Walk. Even with its plethora of adverbs it's a spare and powerful story. Perhaps my favorite thing about it is that SK gives no concrete reason for the walk or why the world is the way it is at that point in time; he leaves it up to the reader to wonder about that. I think some of his later work suffers from way too much exposition.
     
  10. skimom2

    skimom2 Just moseyin' through...

    LOL! Make all the mistakes you want the first go through. That's what first drafts are for. Just vomit up whatever is in your head onto the page. Best to get the story out before it gets stale. After that is when the real work happens :) I think it's not so much that adverbs/adjectives are bad, but that overuse is a lazy way to write. If you see an adverb, it nearly (there's one of the buggers!) always means that the writer is TELLING rather than SHOWING. Sometimes that's warranted. Most of the time, though, it's better to let the reader 'see' the action and decide for themselves in what manner the action is occurring.
     
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  11. GNTLGNT

    GNTLGNT The idiot is IN

    [​IMG] ....locked & loaded with adverbs.....seriously......
     
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