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Tery

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I've been obsessing on videos of abandoned places on You Tube. They just fascinate me. Especially ones where everything is left, with no sign of fire or other disaster. Just.... *poof* Weird, intriguing and sad. I really feel bad when I see amazing antiques that I just know will be left to rot. :(

This was an early video I watched and I was as weirded out by it as the guys exploring (JPVideos are the best at this, IMHO). So, here's the challenge. Watch the video -- only really need to watch the first 5 minutes or so -- and tell us why. Only one or two paragraphs or even less, if you can.


Have at it!
 

GNTLGNT

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I've been obsessing on videos of abandoned places on You Tube. They just fascinate me. Especially ones where everything is left, with no sign of fire or other disaster. Just.... *poof* Weird, intriguing and sad. I really feel bad when I see amazing antiques that I just know will be left to rot. :(

This was an early video I watched and I was as weirded out by it as the guys exploring (JPVideos are the best at this, IMHO). So, here's the challenge. Watch the video -- only really need to watch the first 5 minutes or so -- and tell us why. Only one or two paragraphs or even less, if you can.


Have at it!
...when I’m off the road....will give it a go...
 

Dana Jean

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Okay. First. The guy talking needs to head to his doctor's office. From the get go before he gets hot, he's breathing hard. That's heart disease. And you know what they say: If you have heart disease longer than 4 hours, seek medical attention.

The house itself reminds me of a story.

When I was a kid probably 8? there was a high school senior girl on my street, baby sitter, straight A student, responsible. She asked me if I wanted to go on a bike ride with her. I was thrilled because she was so cool. So, we took off and ended up at this old abandoned house. I was scared just looking at it from the street.

She wanted to go inside but i didn't have any shoes on. (what numbnutz bike rides without shoes?) So, being the responsible older person, she decided we could not investigate because she didn't want me stepping on glass or nails. I was so relieved and she was disappointed.

But since then, I have investigated old abandoned houses and have come to the conclusion that they are where old dolls go to die. Every single crumbling, abandoned house I've ever been in has some jacked-up doll laying around somewhere.
 
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Dana Jean

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In regards to this video:

I see the owner as a withered, apple-carved woman sitting in a faded and tattered muumuu. She's trying to balance a cup of off-brand, dollar store coffee on a tilted, off-balanced kitchen table. This is day three with these coffee grounds.

She is faced towards the window but not focusing on anything in particular. And couldn't if she tried. The cataracts give the world a frosted, vaseline lensed quality. Sort of a nostalgic whitewash for the harsh world around her.

There's a glow from a cigarette butt expertly held between yellowed fingers. She smells gamey. She's forgotten to eat.

Resting on the table near her knobby elbow sits a plastic day-of-the-week pill container loaded with the brightly colored, candy-looking drugs that keep her alive because the Christians say she doesn't have a right to choose. And she's a Christian. The pills are the most vibrant and alive rainbow in the room. In the whole house. They are her Sophie's Choice because she can't afford acceptable sustenance on a regular basis.

Before her son (and only child) passed away, they added the cross bars to the doors and the chain grates to the windows to keep her crack smoking, meth-head grand kids out.

Finally one day in the repeating loop, perched just so on that kitchen chair, the key in her back quit turning. The oil gummed up and the inner workings of her body rusted beyond repair.

Sweet relief! She found her way home to the bosom of her Lord.

It was days before the mailman noticed she wasn't picking up her Piggly Wiggly flyers, Target sale ads and Last Notice billings from the power company.

The crackheads took over the homestead and lost it in 6 months to the county for failure to pay back taxes. They fled in the night, taking only the things that could be sold for more drugs, not realizing in the throes of their madness that years ago, they neglected and left something behind too precious and valuable to sell:

Granny.
 
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Tery

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I love that, Dana Jean! Creepy yet gritty and a bit sentimental, too.

I see the inhabitant as a paranoid old man. He's a conspiracy theorist, a real foil-hat fellow. He collected things so that he could check them for microphones and tiny cameras. He'd buy them or take them if they "felt weird." He had the window bars put in after 9/11. The bars on the doors came after he read about zombie apocalypses. He went out one day for groceries and just disappeared. Maybe he was abducted because he knew the truth about the lizard-people's underground world. Who knows?
 

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Okay. First. The guy talking needs to head to his doctor's office. From the get go before he gets hot, he's breathing hard. That's heart disease. And you know what they say: If you have heart disease longer than 4 hours, seek medical attention.

The house itself reminds me of a story.

When I was a kid probably 8? there was a high school senior girl on my street, baby sitter, straight A student, responsible. She asked me if I wanted to go on a bike ride with her. I was thrilled because she was so cool. So, we took off and ended up at this old abandoned house. I was scared just looking at it from the street.

She wanted to go inside but i didn't have any shoes on. (what numbnutz bike rides without shoes?) So, being the responsible older person, she decided we could not investigate because she didn't want me stepping on glass or nails. I was so relieved and she was disappointed.

But since then, I have investigated old abandoned houses and have come to the conclusion that they are where old dolls go to die. Every single crumbling, abandoned house I've ever been in has some jacked-up doll laying around somewhere.
You're absolutely wrong about the dolls, there's a demon made of plaster and an entrance to mid-world there
 

Dana Jean

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I love that, Dana Jean! Creepy yet gritty and a bit sentimental, too.

I see the inhabitant as a paranoid old man. He's a conspiracy theorist, a real foil-hat fellow. He collected things so that he could check them for microphones and tiny cameras. He'd buy them or take them if they "felt weird." He had the window bars put in after 9/11. The bars on the doors came after he read about zombie apocalypses. He went out one day for groceries and just disappeared. Maybe he was abducted because he knew the truth about the lizard-people's underground world. Who knows?
yes, I can see that too. Good job.
 

GNTLGNT

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...amazing descriptions girls, but the easy answer here is "Hipsters"....why Hipsters?......simple, the windows and doors were barred and braced like a Medieval redoubt to keep their skinny leg jean, scarf wearing asses away from all the kitsch furniture they wanted to buy for pennies on the dollar, and furnish their retro-"beat" pads....