Van Blaricum
I read your story. I'm not a writer so I can't give you any helpful tips but I liked the story and I'm curious as to what will happen next so I think its good Your story seems to have disappeared. Will we ever find out who is in the car on the street outside Dagny's window?
I can't tell yet if Dagny is supposed to be a likable character or not but I like him He's a bit off the wall. Some of his thoughts and comments made me smile... "Deliver me to the queen!" Dagny reminds me a bit of Lather (old Jefferson Airplane song). He doesn't seem to want to be bothered with the real world or growing up. Did you pattern Dagny after someone you know?
I read your story. I'm not a writer so I can't give you any helpful tips but I liked the story and I'm curious as to what will happen next so I think its good Your story seems to have disappeared. Will we ever find out who is in the car on the street outside Dagny's window?
I can't tell yet if Dagny is supposed to be a likable character or not but I like him He's a bit off the wall. Some of his thoughts and comments made me smile... "Deliver me to the queen!" Dagny reminds me a bit of Lather (old Jefferson Airplane song). He doesn't seem to want to be bothered with the real world or growing up. Did you pattern Dagny after someone you know?