Well done Maddie, you moved the story along very nicely and I particularly like that last line, very subtle humour there and it makes me smile every time I read it. 
Kudos for Writers (Halloween Story 2017)
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Excellent addition Maddie . Your writing talents shine.
Now we are really in high gear thanks to Leif. We were ready for action and you delivered. Absolutely superb!
I had 3 new chapters to read today. 
Awesome job with the dialogue, Mr. Nobody!
Maddie, it made me squirm first, with the troublesome sheriff being present, then smole when he is told to make a D-O-L-L!
Leif, the imagery of the dolls sitting beside Allison on the bed...top notch creepy!!
Great job, all of you!!
Awesome job with the dialogue, Mr. Nobody!
Maddie, it made me squirm first, with the troublesome sheriff being present, then smole when he is told to make a D-O-L-L!
Leif, the imagery of the dolls sitting beside Allison on the bed...top notch creepy!!
Great job, all of you!!
Such great imagery and descriptions Leif! You build the tension so nicely!
Awesome work, Leif! Tension is high!!
Leif, great writing. It's really starting to get spooky and I really didn't expect the Sheriff part. I guess it's the SK influence. The story is basically the same but with a lot of small additions. Enjoyed it.
....as always, Leif delivered a whopper of a segment!!!...it's a pleasure to work with you man....
Maddie
Even a stopped clock is right twice a day.
Leif! That was the sweetest creepiest pair of dolls Ive ever seen, and I saw them perfectly in disturbing detail! I loved your part! Excellence created with the dexterity of one very masterful writer! 
Oh and the sheriff surprise was brilliant!
Oh and the sheriff surprise was brilliant!
Maddie
Even a stopped clock is right twice a day.
cat in a bag quote goes here too , I lost it. 
Thank you all so much for your kind words, I appreciate it, I enjoyed it alot.
FlakeNoir Im glad it made you smile every time as many times as you had to read it! Thank you sooo much for all of that! 
Well done Maddie, you moved the story along very nicely and I particularly like that last line, very subtle humour there and it makes me smile every time I read it.
Thank you all so much for your kind words, I appreciate it, I enjoyed it alot.
FlakeNoir Im glad it made you smile every time as many times as you had to read it! Thank you sooo much for all of that!
Really great job, Leif, very descriptive and... creepy!
very descriptive and... creepy!
Leif - painting pictures with your words, scary dolls, suspense abounds. Great job!!!
I apologize, but because of my work schedule today, the story will be going up a few hours late. It will be up between ten and noon today.
Yessir, this story will be printed out and read many times.
Simple awesome, congratulations to the writers.
Simple awesome, congratulations to the writers.
@Mr.Nobody
Great dialog Your words conveyed Tim's tenseness perfectly! I was sitting on the edge of my chair lol.
Maddie
I don't know why the idea of a swing set in a kiddie cemetery creeps me out but it really does. Good job! lol. And I loved the idea of making a doll
Leif
Your visuals are amazing. I didn't think you could beat last year's "spraying a confetti of rotted flesh and tattered clothing into the morning air" but I totally saw those dolls dancing when you wrote "Immense heat distorted the figures and the shimmering waves made them dance like miniature molten marionettes"
Great dialog
Your words conveyed Tim's tenseness perfectly! I was sitting on the edge of my chair lol.Maddie
I don't know why the idea of a swing set in a kiddie cemetery creeps me out but it really does. Good job! lol. And I loved the idea of making a doll
Leif
Your visuals are amazing. I didn't think you could beat last year's "spraying a confetti of rotted flesh and tattered clothing into the morning air" but I totally saw those dolls dancing when you wrote "Immense heat distorted the figures and the shimmering waves made them dance like miniature molten marionettes"
Let me introduce Chris as my ex-husband and very good friend. He wanted to write part of the story and has done a spectacular job. We have to wonder
Great writing, Chris. Welcome the board.
Is Allison acting strangely because of the supernatural activity in the area?
Really good addition, Maddie. You didn't let the middle 'sag' and also set other things in motion, which...
Leif took full advantage of with some great descriptive writing that provided strong visuals and raised the stakes.
Then there's Chris Keenan's part. Everything went up a notch again, but I can't really top my 'behind the scenes' comment so I'll repeat it here:
Poor Tim! Here today, goo tomorrow.
Impressive work, the three of you!
Leif took full advantage of with some great descriptive writing that provided strong visuals and raised the stakes.
Then there's Chris Keenan's part. Everything went up a notch again, but I can't really top my 'behind the scenes' comment so I'll repeat it here:
Poor Tim! Here today, goo tomorrow.
Impressive work, the three of you!